Someone wrote in [personal profile] leo_sosnine 2016-06-10 07:02 pm (UTC)

Очень много запятых.
Особенно - в первых двух абзацах.
Тяжело читается.

Могу посоветовать выбрать пример для подражания - кого-то, чей стиль вам нравится, и писать в таком стиле.


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